On Friday night, multiple coordinated terrorist
attacks were carried out throughout Paris. The most outrageous of them happened
at the well-known Bataclan concert hall.
Whilst the rock band “Eagles of Death Metal” was
playing a gig, three assailants came in the building. The terrorists had pulled
up their car close to the entrance of the concert hall where they got ready for
the attack.
The gunmen had been watching the concert from one of
galleries of the hall before they started firing at the crowd, and after that,
they took several hostages. Amid the panic, some people fled to safety through
an emergency exit.
2 hours later, the security police launched an assault
at Bataclan. They had been planned how to enter at the hall until eventually the
police came through and shot at the attackers. Two of the terrorists are
thought to have blown themselves up.
As a result, at least 80 people were killed as well as countless injured.
Brief but good account of the Bataclan attack. I think you should try and re-write the last couple of words. Uncountable doesn't collocate with injured. However, I see what you are trying to say! Also in the third paragraph you could use possessive 'apostrophe s' in one of the nouns to make it sound more natural! Write a comment here when you have done those corrections. See you later!
ReplyDeleteI've just corrected the mistake in the last paragraph (or I hope so), but I can't see what the problem is with the possessive.
DeleteGood job with the correction. Countless injured sounds a lot better!
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