The International Development Agency has given our
town a grant to be spent on improving transport and housing facilities.
The Planning Director invites you to send a proposal
outlining any problem with existing transport and housing facilities and
explaining how they can be improved. A decision can then be made about how the
money should be spent.
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Over the last few years, our town has experienced many
changes in different ways in a very brief period of time. Therefore, an outline
about the problems related to transport and housing facilities is more
necessary than ever.
As regards public transport, there are some points
that must be sorted out as soon as possible. Buses and trains with delays by
15-30 minutes are quite usual and not only in the rush hours, not to mention
the shortage of timetables. Another shortcoming is the high price of the
tickets; the grant would help to cut down on fares for students and retired in
order to encourage the use of these means of transport.
As far as housing facilities, young people have
difficulty in looking for an apartment according to their needs. Nowadays,
there are quite a lot empty houses and taking advantage of this situation, a
solution may be to use a part of the grant to boost renting and housing
benefits. Apart from that, the water and electricity supply services should be
improved. There are some neighbourhoods where the water tastes weird due to the
old piping system as well as the chlorine. Moreover, some residential buildings
suffer blackouts every day.
I hope that my proposals will be useful and taken into
account. It is a matter of paramount importance to make an effort to overcome
these issues in a near future.
I really like this essay, solid structure, solid arguments. Just a few points as you can see:
ReplyDelete1) are quite usual and not only in the rush hours (I see what you are trying to say here but the structure is a bit problematic. Maybe try the 'not only...but also' structure)
2) not to mention the shortage of timetables (Here I am not sure what you mean by shortage of timetables. Are you talking about those found in the bus stops? Try to clarify.
3) As far as housing facilities,... (We either say 'as far as something is concerned' or ' concerning the...'
4) In a near future? indefinite article?
Keep up the good work Enrique!